Thursday, September 2, 2010

Narrative Essay

Chaos in Supermarket




                      Have you ever touch something in a supermarket and it nearly fell out of

                 its place on the shelf? Have you ever wander away from your parents and

                couldn’t know the way back? I know most of you do, but maybe some didn’t

                experience these things, well, if you didn’t, I’ll tell you in the next paragraph.

                    This story takes place in the supermarket, back when I was very little,

               about from 6 to 9 years old. These were the time I usually got lost in the

              supermarket, well, it happen in the summer, when the weather is very hot

              here in Vietnam. My mom don’t like to stay at home, it’s too hot for her,

             even when the fan is turned on and it’s blowing all the time. So she took me

            to the supermarket where the air-conditioner gave out cool air and made

           everybody felt comfortable. It’s a very big supermarket, there’s lots of

          shelves with goods stored on it, there’s a lot of people talking and walking

          looking for things to buy. My mom took me to see plates, cups and bowls.

         They’re so pretty and lots of colors and patterns painted on it, curiously I

         took one down and look at it. When I put it back on the shelf, I don’t put all

        of it back on, I just put half of it on the shelf, so it wobbled and nearly fell

       out, but luckily my mom hold it in time and put it back on. After that, she

       took me to see the plastic flowers in a pot, those pots are not glass or clay

      that are heated. It’s like some plastic heated and paint on it to make it look

      like a pot carved out from wood, this time I also took one down to see it. Just

      like the first time I put it back but just a half of it, half of it is in the air, it

     almost fell off. But again my mom hold it just in time and put it back, this

     time she looked sternly at me and said: “ Why don’t you keep your hands to

     yourself?” I said: “ I was curious about things.” My mom said: “ Well, you

    can ask me, don’t just touch everything, what if you break it? Then you’ll

    have to pay money for it, it’s a waste of money if you break things. When

    you grow up, if you can handle things, just pick it up carefully and don’t

   drop it. Then put the whole thing back on the shelf carefully.” “Yes,

   mother.” Then we went to look at clothes, I hate looking at clothes the most,

   so when my mom was taking out some clothes to admire them I sneak out to

   looked at the toys. When I grew tired of it, I went back to find my mom, but

   the worst had just began, I can’t find my mom anywhere!!!! I ran all of the

   aisles of clothes to look for her, my heart beat very fast, then I saw her

   looking for me too. I ran to her and shouted: “ Ma, I’m over here.” She heard

  me and ran to me, then I was saved in her arms, she was panting and so was

  Then she looked at me angrily and said: “ Why do you run off like that?

  You can got lost and…” She couldn’t say anymore, I said: “ I’m sorry,

   Ma. I just wanted to saw the toys so badly that I forgot to told you.” “ Next

   time if you want to go somewhere tell me, then I will know where you are

  going, promise?” “ I promise” Then she smiled: “ That’s my good girl. Let’s

  go home.”

         From then on, these events give me a lesson, never ran out of your

     parents sight and respect things in the supermarket. Thanks to my mom, she

     taught me a lot of things and when I think back to these events I always

     smiled and remember what mom taught me.

2 comments:

  1. I also think a little bit about lessons based on this essay. That's I think don't do things that you're not sure, it can be fail, Do I think right? And mostly, this is an ordinary thing that every young kids can meet with. Luckily, you don't greet with any kidnappers! In summary, this time makes you to think before you do, right? I hope so. So I wish that you never meet with this problem anymore!!! ^.^ :D

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  2. Nice Samantha. I really liked that you were using dialog to help describe events. You need to work more on adding descriptive language. Also the formatting made your story kind of difficult to read.

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